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SAT Writing: Improving Sentences

Improving Sentences

Select the choice that results in the best sentence – the sentence that follows the requirements of standard written English and communicates effectively.

Diana Nyad is a swimmer who many endurance swimmers admire for her perseverance.

A.  who many endurance swimmers admire for her perseverance

B.   who much endurance swimmers admire for her perseverance

C.  who many endurance swimmers admire her for perseverance

D.  whom many endurance swimmers admire for her perseverance

E.  whom many endurance swimmers admire because of her perseverance

 

The Knowsys Method

Read the entire sentence carefully, listening for errors.  Then focus on the underlined part.  Evaluate it by checking it against the Big 8 Grammar Rules.  If you find an error, use that error to quickly eliminate any answer choices that do not fix the problem you found.

The grammar rule that is tested here is pronouns.  The very first word in the sentence is a pronoun.  Notice that Nyad is not doing the action of admiring, instead she is being admired by others.  You can check this by saying to yourself, "Many people admire HER."  "Her" is an object like "whom" instead of a subject like "she," so you must change the "who" to "whom."  Mark this error and look down at your answer choices.

A.  The first choice matches the original sentence and does not fix the error that you found. 

B.  This choice does not fix the error that you found, and it introduces a new error.  The word "many" is a count word that describes "endurance swimmers."  You can count swimmers, so the word "many" is correct.  If you though that "much" was correct, you probably thought that "much" was describing only the word "endurance," which is a non-count word.  Eliminate this choice.

C.   This answer choice does not fix the error that you found.  It also moves the word "her," creating additional sentence structure problems.

D.  This choice matches your prediction.  Keep it and check the last choice.

E.  This choice is wordier than the previous choice.  Eliminate it. 

 

The correct answer is (D). 

This is a medium level question. 

 

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